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kalinaraI'm realizing I have to go back and fix the chapter titles for this book. Eh, I'll do it later.
Anyway, last time, the book remembered Maeve exists. Pretty much only to make her a strawman opponent to Keely getting an abortion. I mean, at least her argument is along the lines of "it's too late and will probably kill you", but I could wish for a little better.
The first part of the book, while decent, was remarkably repetitive at times, with at least two separate occasions each of Keely storming off, meeting Rory, asking the same questions, meeting Teirnan, hearing the same doubts, consulting with Ian, clashing with Brennan and so on.
Imagine for a moment, we actually cut out some of that repetition and gave Keely's sister some focus in this feminist themed book?
What if we actually got to play a little bit with the contrast between having the status of a princess, the protection of legitimacy, and the burden of betrothal, to having none of those things, and then maybe got into the fact that despite Keely's powers, despite Maeve's anonymity, both end up used and abused by men who try to use them against their loved ones and force them into pregnancy.
I don't know, I feel like there's something to explore there. Instead of just "Keely's not like other girls and her plight is the only one that actually matters."
( I'm not really being fair because I am invested in Keely's plight. This could be done better though. )
Anyway, last time, the book remembered Maeve exists. Pretty much only to make her a strawman opponent to Keely getting an abortion. I mean, at least her argument is along the lines of "it's too late and will probably kill you", but I could wish for a little better.
The first part of the book, while decent, was remarkably repetitive at times, with at least two separate occasions each of Keely storming off, meeting Rory, asking the same questions, meeting Teirnan, hearing the same doubts, consulting with Ian, clashing with Brennan and so on.
Imagine for a moment, we actually cut out some of that repetition and gave Keely's sister some focus in this feminist themed book?
What if we actually got to play a little bit with the contrast between having the status of a princess, the protection of legitimacy, and the burden of betrothal, to having none of those things, and then maybe got into the fact that despite Keely's powers, despite Maeve's anonymity, both end up used and abused by men who try to use them against their loved ones and force them into pregnancy.
I don't know, I feel like there's something to explore there. Instead of just "Keely's not like other girls and her plight is the only one that actually matters."
( I'm not really being fair because I am invested in Keely's plight. This could be done better though. )